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    dots Submission Name: Your Mistakedots
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    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 895



    Description:
       In The Style Of Burned, Crank And Glass.

    The Real Message Is Down The Left Side.
    And The Very Last Line.

    You Can Probably Guess What This Is About.
    Tell Me If You Like It.


    I Have Had A Bit Of Inspiration Out Of This.


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    dotsYour Mistakedots
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    I Donít Know What To Say About It.

    Feel The Cold Deed Slap Me In The Face.

    Like A Burning Cold

    You Might Know How It Is, But I Doubt It.

    Betrayed By Your Thoughts And Actions

    Me Feeling Like This Is New.

    ~:~

    Itís Hard To Believe

    Too Hard To Deal With.

    Much Of It My Fault Too.

    To Know All Of It.

    Think Next Time Please?

    About Your Decisions.

    ~:~

    I Feel The Direct Pain

    Know That I Do.

    Youíre Being Given A Second Chance.

    Sorry It Had To Be Like This.

    ~:~

    Itís A Long Way From Love

    Your Choices Show Your Intelligence

    Problem Numero Uno.

    Now Fix It.





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