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As she stares into the mirror


Author: poetry chica
ASL Info:    17/f/usa
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Words: 244
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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trying to make it out


As she stares into the mirror



As she stares into the mirror
She contemplates her fate
Reaching out to the darkest parts of her soul.
It screams out in torment
Cut, cut, cut!

As she stares into the mirror
She feels the monster stirring within
Scratching just below the surface
Calling out for pain
Blood, blood, blood!

As she stares into the mirror
Fingering the blade
She touches lightly the veins of her left wrist
Feeling her heartbeat.
Pulse, pulse, pulse.

She stands up so quickly
The chair clatters to the floor
The razor falls from her hand
Slipping through her fingers.

She turns from the mirror
Walks away slowly
Muttering to herself,
“I don’t need it,
Not anymore.”

She passes through the hallway
Staring up at photos of herself
Everything from gap-toothed grins
To dark, piercing scowls.

As she passes she sees her own transformation
The pictures darken with each passing year
Until her gaze comes to rest
On her last self-portrait.

The eyes staring back at her
Are filled with too much pain
But they still hold hope
Still burn with the fire of life.

She arises from the glowing embers of her past
A phoenix ready to fly.
A chance to shake off the ashes.
To let her true colors shine.

She’s becoming a different person.
One who’s not afraid to trust,
Not afraid to fall in love.
Not afraid to live.

Not Anymore.




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  I like the positive progression! At first when I start reading I thought "Ugh.. another cutter.." but turns out it's not. There's a message of hope in your writing and I like to hear that :)
| Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]


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