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    dots Submission Name: As she stares into the mirrordots
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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAs she stares into the mirrordots
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    As she stares into the mirror
    She contemplates her fate
    Reaching out to the darkest parts of her soul.
    It screams out in torment
    Cut, cut, cut!

    As she stares into the mirror
    She feels the monster stirring within
    Scratching just below the surface
    Calling out for pain
    Blood, blood, blood!

    As she stares into the mirror
    Fingering the blade
    She touches lightly the veins of her left wrist
    Feeling her heartbeat.
    Pulse, pulse, pulse.

    She stands up so quickly
    The chair clatters to the floor
    The razor falls from her hand
    Slipping through her fingers.

    She turns from the mirror
    Walks away slowly
    Muttering to herself,
    I dont need it,
    Not anymore.

    She passes through the hallway
    Staring up at photos of herself
    Everything from gap-toothed grins
    To dark, piercing scowls.

    As she passes she sees her own transformation
    The pictures darken with each passing year
    Until her gaze comes to rest
    On her last self-portrait.

    The eyes staring back at her
    Are filled with too much pain
    But they still hold hope
    Still burn with the fire of life.

    She arises from the glowing embers of her past
    A phoenix ready to fly.
    A chance to shake off the ashes.
    To let her true colors shine.

    Shes becoming a different person.
    One whos not afraid to trust,
    Not afraid to fall in love.
    Not afraid to live.

    Not Anymore.




    Submitted on 2008-02-22 10:56:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the positive progression! At first when I start reading I thought "Ugh.. another cutter.." but turns out it's not. There's a message of hope in your writing and I like to hear that :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]


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