WOOT!! I am so happy today, I have been reading great stuff, and yours is no different. I love the way you chose to write this, as if you are carving out your own universe with your words. Almost like the verbal cookie cutter, although I don't think you can eat it. . "Ponderous with the after-birth of Athena" What a truly powerful statement, it honestly blew my mind, is was brilliant."I am curled around oceans/
and stars,..." It's this like that got me, and grabbed me in, almost like you were truly wrapping youself around me. In a figurative sense, that is. This is a good piece, I can appreciate this one because well, this is why I write. Kudos to you, I really like this.
As much as I don't want to sound like an elitist, I have to say that we are definately a very important class of human beings. We are fools, and in our foolishness we stumble upon reality and get possessed by it. It wings us, loud speakers us and puts us in the oddest looking pedastel that this world can come face to face with. There, we are forced to speak with the hardest kind of language to speak - that of our souls. And from that place, we can shake the [censored] earth.
Anyway, what I like about your piece is that it possess a strong degree of authenticity regardless of how easy or common it is for one to go ballistic with this theme (feeling.) You really had a voice with this one and it has an element in it that lets me feel as though this not just a reckless word-salad that you need to write to get attention.
The imagery is very forceful. It has a very potent tongue that lets me imagine someone wanting to rip the world apart with her gift trying to fight the emotional paralysis that this world often threatens us with.