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Shh.


Author: Jakirina
ASL Info:    19/F/WI
Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216 /200 /80
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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The assignment was to write a seven line poem. This is what came out. And the word 'gleaming' should be on the 4th line, but it didn't really fit on here...sorry.


Shh.


Quiet and I’ll tell you a secret: There’s a hole between my legs,
dark and painful. I went down to the edge of the river,
a pebble in my mouth, I lay upon cold stones willing my flesh
to blend into the heavy shifting green. I cursed the moon for gleaming
off my paleness so vividly. This is where my heart exploded.
Carefully I collected and wrapped the pieces in Ivy leaves,
then gave it to my father.




Submitted on 2008-02-23 14:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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