Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: May You Get All You Wish Fordots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 639
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1362



    Description:
       What if all our wishes came true?


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMay You Get All You Wish Fordots
    -------------------------------------------


    Pulling sand along the way in the wind are dreams lost that intertwine with invisible motion.
    What happens to those unrealized dreams?
    What if everyone on the planet had the power to fulfill those dreams.?
    I suppose a lot of people would immediately drop dead and many would go straight to hell.
    A lot of people would be engaged in intercourse, whether they liked each other or not.
    But we would also have cancer cured and be able to traverse the galaxy as we please.
    Or is it more like the nature of a BEE. You get the honey but also the sting. Speaking of bees why can't we stop them from stinging little kids? I mean, if we can make it to the moon?
    Would our dreams hurt us? Is that why they don't come true?
    Peoples lives are turned to hell when they can't do or say what they want. Or when they CAN do what they want. It's a double edged sword . There is an ancient curse that says "May all your wishes be granted."
    Maybe we poetic types could all be like Coleridge. Incredible inner visions, though some were induced by opium. It seems wonderful to be able to do that. The entire world envies you yet, as I understand it, he was miserable.
    Theres that bee again.
    Me, I'm still rooting for pleasure and joy and ecstasy happiness.




    Submitted on 2008-02-23 23:28:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    158011

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Fasade written by jackz
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    prison written by ShyOne
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Etiquette written by saartha
    the testing of hypotheses written by Daniel Barlow
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Carry written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Records I written by Raphael
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Every..... written by jackz
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry