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    dots Submission Name: Hesitationdots
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    Author: Cora Windover
    ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 862/761/201
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 245
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       you know I'm serious about them when I start writing again. X3.


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    dotsHesitationdots
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    There's a time when you say, "I love you"
    And I'm suddenly shy,
    Suddenly caught by the
    Beauty of all that you are,
    Beautiful as the stars.

    And it takes me a while
    To reply,
    And this is the reason why...

    I've never been in love with someone
    Quite like you,
    Someone who,
    So easily tells me
    They'll love me forever
    And never will want to let go...

    I love you so.
    And I wanted to let you know

    When I pause for a moment
    It's not hesitation
    It's just my elation
    That you,
    More than anyone ever
    From now til forever
    Will love
    Me
    Too.




    Submitted on 2008-02-24 16:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really sweet, and I can understand what you are feeling. I have always felt that way with my ex-boyfriend (the only reason he's my ex is because I moved to a different part of the country.) The only thing I can see that is wrong is the last four lines lines. It looks like you're saying

    "From now til forever With love Me Too."

    There is just too much pausing in the last four lines to make it make sense. Besides that, I think this was really well written and you caught the idea of it perfectly, that little hesitation you get, when everything just stops and it's just the two of you. Nice write.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]



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