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I see you with her, holding her
And I start to give up
on holding on to you.
I lose hope.
It fades, like headlights,
Far, on a dark highway.
You smile with her, laugh with her
And I give up. I give in.
I lose hope and let defeat win.
I let go of you a little everyday
And I see hope fade.
I settle into what I have become
I settle into my dark lonesome home.
Some days, I think of you and my smile fades.
All hope is lost and wasted
on this dark highway.
| this isn't bad. i personally like the repitition but not everyone does. be careful about being redundant. and don't force rhymes.|
"let defeat win" is redundant. i would change it.
overall, good write. keep it up.
|| Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ] |