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a life that ends
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Well again one of my oldies this time a better one that was when i was trying to be an intermediate poet though i tried to get through general topics.
a life that ends
life in the way in the fall it may
make thyself upon the quest
a journey of knowledge a journey of hope
endless search until death to rest.
chances in life we miss we get
in all that depends on how much we try
try until death must the motto be for life
will ever be the aim always oh my!
a window is the world of in and all
a fly tries to cross with the glass closed
it tries till it dies until it reaches
where does it go nowhere so opposed.
life to be like that life to end
sad in one case happy to send
flowers of death to thyself to any
will be forever a life that ends.
Submitted on 2008-02-25 03:59:33
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