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    dots Submission Name: a life that endsdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Well again one of my oldies this time a better one that was when i was trying to be an intermediate poet though i tried to get through general topics.


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    dotsa life that endsdots
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    life in the way in the fall it may
    make thyself upon the quest
    a journey of knowledge a journey of hope
    endless search until death to rest.

    chances in life we miss we get
    in all that depends on how much we try
    try until death must the motto be for life
    will ever be the aim always oh my!

    a window is the world of in and all
    a fly tries to cross with the glass closed
    it tries till it dies until it reaches
    where does it go nowhere so opposed.

    life to be like that life to end
    sad in one case happy to send
    flowers of death to thyself to any
    will be forever a life that ends.




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