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    dots Submission Name: Angerdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       This is one my oldies where i was a beginner like a stupid i was trying to just rhyme it out and not feel it.


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    dotsAngerdots
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    try to remain calm and that is what i seek,
    but someone will come to make it like a bleak.

    When the fire starts it spreads with the wind,
    it spreads so fast that of a fire in a gin.

    Trying to cool i do get cooled,
    the person in front is surely fooled.

    The fire in me is waiting to start,
    another storm as painful as a dart.

    The anger i saw with the blood rise high,
    i prevent that from happening the burning of the eye.

    The only fear after is whether he will die,
    then the crime will be done and nothing to lie.

    Anger is dangerous cause it never ends,
    trying to stop it depends on how much we spend(being calm).




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