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    dots Submission Name: Attaining goddots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       One of my old poems. I think this is the time i started changing to an atheist.

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    dotsAttaining goddots

    To attain god there are many ways,
    but one different from other i says.
    Doing good is one way to attain,
    but the way i say is full of pain.
    Pain in the sense for not hurting,
    by using a tool or something.
    Brain is the power which is the main,
    controlling it is impossible or insane.
    Keep the mind cool and blank,
    to attain peace is tough to be frank.
    Control the brain is control the sense,
    be precise and have no tense.
    Control the sense is control yourself,
    which must be done by you and myself.
    Control yourself is attaining god,
    you'll reach goal not easily,cause it is the lengthiest rod

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      Attaining God is an interesting concept. The way in which you present your thoughts seems a little confusing to this reader, but perhaps the notion of attaining god might confuse anyone.

    I would not imagine God would want to be "attained" like a commodity to be bought or sold, or a punch-line to a joke to be delivered, or even a specimen in a petrie dish to be examined and scrutinized. What kind of god is that?

    I prefer the God who created me so that we could spend eternity together.
    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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