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    dots Submission Name: be my valentinedots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 586
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    Description:
       my second love in life


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    dotsbe my valentinedots
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    All the love that is to be
    in the air in the heart in the mind so free
    makes you wonder that are you dreaming
    dream is it at the top of a tree.

    Maid oh mine search you not less
    found not found that has been in this world
    is life so cruel for me not to
    find my maya in my dreams so curled.

    Up in the sky we see the stars
    infinite are those love written all over
    we find ourselves in the doom of its curse
    love the water in which we hover.

    Wait have i done in my life in my days
    missed have i missed u so much in vain
    cry will i not for the dream to come true
    be my valentine and end my pain.




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