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    dots Submission Name: xTouchedxdots

    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    ...and you run with conviction
    that it makes perfect sense
    to flee from the pain
    and build your defense...

    the ground is parched, though,
    for not a tear has been shed;
    in the fields of your burdens,
    all the crops are long dead

    if thaw could come to the berg of you,
    so the cleansing tears would flow,
    the release would free the child within
    and the faith of youth could grow

    pain is not a monster but
    a path for our human hearts,
    as stepping stones to a better
    road that cathartic grief imparts

    please don't flinch or fly
    away or refuse to taste the trial,
    but learn the lessons as they come
    and thus crucify denial

    touch the pain with your fingers
    and let your heart be moved,
    so wished for peace may be
    embraced, and our desired love


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      wow that is incredible i never was that good at writing poems...but you should check out my page and if you want to know what i look like look in the box with my pic everyone says i look hot LOL!! Anyway read some of my pems...most of them are love stricken but's how i am!
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