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Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18 /60 /36
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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...and you run with conviction
that it makes perfect sense
to flee from the pain
and build your defense...

the ground is parched, though,
for not a tear has been shed;
in the fields of your burdens,
all the crops are long dead

if thaw could come to the berg of you,
so the cleansing tears would flow,
the release would free the child within
and the faith of youth could grow

pain is not a monster but
a path for our human hearts,
as stepping stones to a better
road that cathartic grief imparts

please don't flinch or fly
away or refuse to taste the trial,
but learn the lessons as they come
and thus crucify denial

touch the pain with your fingers
and let your heart be moved,
so wished for peace may be
embraced, and our desired love


Submitted on 2008-02-25 11:04:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow that is incredible i never was that good at writing poems...but you should check out my page and if you want to know what i look like look in the box with my pic everyone says i look hot LOL!! Anyway read some of my pems...most of them are love stricken but's how i am!
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