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    dots Submission Name: Voices in my headdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsVoices in my headdots
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    I can't control the overflowing impluses.
    My head feels like it's been hit with a ton of bricks.
    I hear these vioces in my head screaming ate me.
    The sound is loud that my ears start to bleed and yet it is quite.
    Everynight I wakeup screaming and holding my head.
    I wakeup to the sound over a thousand thoughts.
    I want this sound to leave me but the truth is I can't get off the carosel until I make it stop and all I have to do is stop kidding myself because I caan only fool myself for so long.
    But in the end my mind is permenitly scared with the screaming thoughts in my head.
    I'm stuck with these voices in my head.




    Submitted on 2008-02-25 11:35:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was different from the last one i read
    everyone heres those voices when they want to i think thats why we become writers to channel those thughts

    i think you could edit this piece and make it a real great piece of work

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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