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    dots Submission Name: Red moondots

    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Story/Gothic
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    dotsRed moondots

    I watch as the moon sit in the sky on a dark night.
    I stare at it as it slowly dissappers counting the seconds until.
    I look around as the landscape changes to a blood color.
    I look back up and the red moon stares back at me.
    My eyes full of amazment and they change color as the moon changes.
    My body and mind goes though a tranformation.
    I slowly become my true self, my true form, a demon.
    I rome the empty feild destroying everything until the moon returns to normal.
    The blazing red moon slowly fades and my changes begin to stop and I return to normal.
    I fall on my back and gaze at the white moon and sigh.
    I get up and watch as the moon sits in the sky on a dark night.

    Submitted on 2008-02-25 14:52:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is nice. i'd love too read more by u. but it seems like ur going over ur self.

    [I fall on my back and gaze at the white moon and sigh.
    I get up and watch as the moon sits in the sky on a dark night.]
    a white moon on a dark night is an example dark with a white moon cancels it self out.

    u emo wierdo
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece alot. i really hope to read more by you soon. somehow your demons have caught my interest. you are a good writer... no im not kissing your a$$ just because your a demon but its a nice piece of ART if you would like it if i called you an artist. continue in your work so i may be able to continue to read.


    | Posted on 2008-02-27 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was good and i think yor pic is good too
    its almost like the arnie movie about mars and the end of days
    good story line

    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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