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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 680
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       Doesn't make alot of sense as a whole, but you can't deny that it rhymes


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    dotsRaindots
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    I watched the rain fall from the limitless sky
    I looked back to the earth and saw the boy die.
    Raised face to the heavens asking them why.
    Blinked once as a drop impacted my eye.

    And thats how they want me, face to the ground
    Without their answers, without a sound
    from the lips of the angels. Their sordid affairs
    are not for my notice, "Stay Unaware"

    Walk through a forest, do you feel you're alone?
    You're not, but you know that this isn't your home
    You're out of your element, not of this earth
    The End-All Anachronism, the day of your birth.




    Submitted on 2008-02-25 23:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah but the whole point is for it to be cohesive.. to blend. If you can master that... rhyme a little better, you'd probably be the best on here.
    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi i thought this was great the picture i got from the words was how i feel about everything in general and the pic of the boy is great he looks happy

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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