Rain

Author: MC white ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71 /73 /45 Words: 106

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Rain

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I watched the rain fall from the limitless sky I looked back to the earth and saw the boy die. Raised face to the heavens asking them why. Blinked once as a drop impacted my eye. And thats how they want me, face to the ground Without their answers, without a sound from the lips of the angels. Their sordid affairs are not for my notice, "Stay Unaware" Walk through a forest, do you feel you're alone? You're not, but you know that this isn't your home You're out of your element, not of this earth The End-All Anachronism, the day of your birth.

Submitted on 2008-02-25 23:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Yeah but the whole point is for it to be cohesive.. to blend. If you can master that... rhyme a little better, you'd probably be the best on here.

| Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

hey hi i thought this was great the picture i got from the words was how i feel about everything in general and the pic of the boy is great he looks happy sandman

| Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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