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    dots Submission Name: Never heredots
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    Author: abstracted
    ASL Info:    20/f/melb aus
    Elite Ratio:    4.85 - 8/8/9
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 969
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsNever heredots
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    I close my eyes
    So verey tight
    I see your face
    Your eyes so verey bright
    Your lips so soft
    But then it happens
    You start to fade
    You've been ripped away....
    My heart starts to call
    It calls your name
    No Response
    Is what i am given
    No Response
    Is what I feared
    No Reponse
    Is all you have
    I see you there
    But never here
    I ask myself how much longer
    As i rip myself into pieces
    My heart holds you so close my mind even closer
    Forever in my mind
    Yet never here to touch




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