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    dots Submission Name: desiredots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 587
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    Description:
       Lust to my extent


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    dotsdesiredots
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    long have i had the kama the desire

    the lush in the lips

    the eyes on fire.

    more of her in the eyes in the flesh

    harder the feel

    the desire of sex.

    oh! my does the king rise high

    so does the rage

    desire of oh my.

    mad so mad does the brain have to become

    till the moonlight hits

    the white of some.

    so does the kiss the touch the fire

    made to become

    the power of desire




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