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    dots Submission Name: Enjoydots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Summer holiday just started for me. Oldies poems of mine.

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    life is an adventure full of joy,
    different places and people to meet.
    For the purpose of life for a girl or a boy,
    is to attain success standing on their feet.

    A part of life is there to play,
    cause children have the right to do.
    The time is valuable that is what i say,
    cause never will it come again to you.

    Then comes the life which is actually to be lived,
    full of troubles and problems to solve.
    The meaning of life which is lived,
    mankind is real for it has to evolve.

    Then comes the life as old as the earth,
    for time is less for remembrance of birth.
    But each of the times has its own fun,
    enjoyment will be there as long as the sun.

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