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    dots Submission Name: too many touch-me-notsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 630
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotstoo many touch-me-notsdots
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    down the line,
    something follows the rose
    but i'm lost.
    i know that there's a cave
    & some misgiven percentiles
    along the way.

    there's some rough version of happy
    amidst the tornado.
    i see a rush of colour,
    wind mixed with alcohol
    & the pavement.

    i'm convinced
    that there's a romantic philosophy
    in the fever of the wood,
    as hot and brutish
    as the mulch inside me.

    i open a flower from my palm
    that no one can see
    but the lavish.
    i pull the world over my eyes
    in music
    & let the notes become.

    all-mother is watching
    every step
    that child would make
    in folly.

    i am perplexed
    at the swinging of the moon
    & how gentle
    the darb laps of summer
    can accrue.

    i've stepped
    on too many touch-me-nots
    in my sleep.
    i must awaken
    unto my under-darling always.




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