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sunbeam


Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 82
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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sunbeam



There are changes in the weather
and leaves fall they shadder
on mountains and on the hill side

There are crystal snow falling
and mothers are calling
their children inside for the night

Your the rain causing thunder
the reason I wonder
about growing up all the time

Some might blame it on the season
or melancholy reading
but ive never felt this before

Every morning drunk flower
every sunbeam i devour
is bringing me closer to you




Submitted on 2008-02-26 09:04:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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