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    dots Submission Name: Go Feb...dots
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    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 383
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       My hearts not empty, though my soul is not foul, I am but a human without price on my head. Does it make me worthless?


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    Insignia plagues me
    Mormons club me
    Disasters strike me
    I am worthwhile parrot of the blue lagoon

    Bored, desperate & laughing away nothing,
    Being something color less makes me want to puke,
    Just to see what color my stomach churns

    Foods are heavy, my tummy is bulgy,
    I am marooned, ballooned and most of all pestered,
    Wondering how, high, low and hallow,
    Desolate and shallow,

    Wallow my pillow and I am there,
    Eating away half the bed,
    Whimsical freedom and downsized membranes,
    Passionate hearts, dumbest of thoughts,

    Loveless desires, desire of thought,
    Endless it may
    May be May will bring light in to the hollow,
    Humpy, fool hardy February….





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    ||| Comments |||
      You my friend, Have a way with words
    this is a good write, I like it.
    after writing you News Papers I thought
    I would keep my comments short.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-30 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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