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    dots Submission Name: Hot or colddots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 550
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    Bytes: 552



    Description:
       old ying yang effect of school.


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    dotsHot or colddots
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    A new day starts with something to be done,
    having work or at least some.
    Then the attention at school needed,
    for some we understand and some spoon feeded.
    Then for the home where we relax to go,
    for the next day again for a show.
    This process repeats with all people there,
    new faces sometimes for us to stare.
    Life is faith and faith is life,
    sharp edge feelings as sharp as a knife.
    During this period we think young or old,
    when and where do i keep my brain hot or cold.




    Submitted on 2008-02-27 03:06:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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