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    dots Submission Name: Insects and peopledots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       beginners poem. An old one of mine. Was writing this when i was seeing an ant.

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    dotsInsects and peopledots

    we are the people who live like insects,
    whose cabins and rooms closed where all happiness sets.
    What a world are we living,
    with places where we are staying in.
    where is the place where is the peace,
    once we had were free attest.
    But what we have is nothing ours,
    with politics and people rushing like showers.
    The people themselves don't want to be free,
    as for them it is a wonderful tree.

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