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    dots Submission Name: See Medots
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    Author: Druecilla
    ASL Info:    18/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 22/26/28
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Tears they fall silently,

    With any avial they follow me,

    Hurting so deep,

    Missing so much of my sleep,

    I feel weak,

    So very bleak,

    I just want to die,

    Give up my life,

    Because all I do is cry,

    As the days go by,

    I don't feel the comfort I once felt,

    I remember the man who beat Thomas and I with a belt,

    The days in foster care were not much fun either,

    But life goes on right,

    Isn't that what you told me,

    When you were never there to hold me,

    What can I do to make you see?

    What can I do for you just to finally see me?




    Submitted on 2008-02-27 07:52:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really well written and heart felt. I was drawn in to read this poem because I wrote a song with the same title. Long forgotten, but I still remember the chorus, that's all.

    I guess that's almost as bad as it gets. A bit worse than having a family that just doesn't care and your stuck with them. I could go on and on about my life story, but that's not what I'm here for.

    It seems like there are times when you have a rhyme scheme, then you don't. I don't know, maybe I'm just slow.

    I really enjoyed this poem and I guess I can just say that it gets better. That's what everyone keeps telling me. It hasn't happened yet, but they keep telling me it will.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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