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    dots Submission Name: Terabithiadots
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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTerabithiadots
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    Feelings swirling round in my brain
    Moving too quickly for me to process
    Voices screaming out in my mind, begging to be heard.
    Words twisting through the black hole that is my mind.

    Gazing out the window into the outside world,
    Wondering if I will ever be able to bridge this gap.
    My breath coming out in short gasps,
    As I sit here struggling to form the words that will help me to build this bridge




    Submitted on 2008-02-27 09:59:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a well thoughtout write but it think you could have said more like what are the voices saying or somthing like that but other then that it was very nice and I can truly relate to this because I too have thoughts in my head begging to be heared. O and the title I don't really get sorry:( but again good write I expect great things from you. until then............

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