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A Broken Home


Author: poetry chica
ASL Info:    17/f/usa
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Words: 78
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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just kinda writing to write


A Broken Home



A Broken Home
Hearts wounded and torn
Souls battered and bruised
Egos crushed and beaten

Love has been lost
Never to be found again
Not in this home
Not in this place.

A shattered piece of being
A light that’s been snuffed out
No longer to shine
No longer to glow

She used to be happy
Used to smile and laugh
Now she’s six feet under
At the hands of the one she loved.




Submitted on 2008-02-27 10:00:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I hope that this poem is not based on true events. If it is, then I will say I'm sorry.
Poem-wise, this was a well-written piece.
Angel
| Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really well written and a sad piece. I hope its not true, but if it is, I can relate.
I like the simpleness of the poem. A poem doesn't have to be all flashy. It can be simple and still be a very good poem. I can't think of anything wrong with this, but it really touched me. Thanks for the read.

~*~katara~*~
| Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
  this was short but had a real vivid point
i'm hoping this is fiction and not based on true reality

sandman
| Posted on 2008-02-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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