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    dots Submission Name: A Broken Homedots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       just kinda writing to write

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    dotsA Broken Homedots

    A Broken Home
    Hearts wounded and torn
    Souls battered and bruised
    Egos crushed and beaten

    Love has been lost
    Never to be found again
    Not in this home
    Not in this place.

    A shattered piece of being
    A light that’s been snuffed out
    No longer to shine
    No longer to glow

    She used to be happy
    Used to smile and laugh
    Now she’s six feet under
    At the hands of the one she loved.

    Submitted on 2008-02-27 10:00:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hope that this poem is not based on true events. If it is, then I will say I'm sorry.
    Poem-wise, this was a well-written piece.
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really well written and a sad piece. I hope its not true, but if it is, I can relate.
    I like the simpleness of the poem. A poem doesn't have to be all flashy. It can be simple and still be a very good poem. I can't think of anything wrong with this, but it really touched me. Thanks for the read.

    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      this was short but had a real vivid point
    i'm hoping this is fiction and not based on true reality

    | Posted on 2008-02-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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