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    dots Submission Name: Reflections of Author: Lifedots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Something I wrote while reflecting on my current situation, and my life. I did it in an older style, for it felt fitting. About heartbreak, stepping forward, and strength.


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    dotsReflections of Author: Lifedots
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    Still, o still beating of thine heart

    Slain are you, held within cage of dark

    Stitch thee, with needle borne with golden thread

    Cast away heartache then, wrap stilled hands around thine head

    Grace thoughts of purest form

    Question not life of torn

    Ahead those eyes trace paths of thine own destinies

    Truth, o heart, truth forgone will now be seen

    Lest be known your firey rage, scathed with iron hot

    And tread with square frame, constant strength, o thine heartbreak naught.




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      Honestly Hel I like it.I personally believe it's anthology material."Truth, o heart, truth forgone will now be seen Lest be known your firey rage, (scratched with iron hot.<These lines stood out to me the most) I will have to remember them.Pretty Hel nice piece.
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very nice I personally think, I liked the old english, really added something to it. I'd give you some feedback but I am not enough of a poet myself, hope you dont mind my compliments

    :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by Aleitheian | [ Reply to This ]


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