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    dots Submission Name: Shedots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 365/561/240
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsShedots
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    She is naked
    and her nose is perfect.
    The mirror admires her
    as she steps here, steps there,
    side to side, all to see
    that she looks fine.
    Things are lookin’ good today.
    She smiles, and looks around
    to make sure no one saw that.

    She puts on her clothes and recalls a movie.
    It went like this:
    “Why are you wearing that stupid bunny suit?”
    And the scary bunny said, “Why are you wearing
    that stupid human suit?”

    She takes off her clothes
    expecting to be more of herself,
    but it is such a falsehood.
    She quickly puts her clothes back on
    and sighs relief—
    there. She is complete.

    She likes her shoes her pants her shirt.
    She likes her nose her eyes her mouth.
    She doesn’t know what she’d be

    without.





    Submitted on 2008-02-28 01:38:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Geez. Guermo's comment is ridiculously thoughtful. I thought this was going to be an Awakening-like moment. Where a person goes back to a deep, scary void.

    And then with the mention of the mirror, I thought about Winston looking at his fading existence in the mirror. It reminded me of a lot of things.

    I was surprised by the ending because I thought this was going to be about being naked and trying to sum up the courage to just be yourself; for your inside to reflect on the outside. At the end of it though, I'd have to agree that I would very much like to keep my clothes on.
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. a well written explanation of someone (at least how i see it) that relies on what they wear to define who they are. I like how you wrote in that she took off her clothes, trying to be herself, only to realize that thats not who she is.

    I enjoyed the movie quote, it reminded me of one similar from Thoreau's Civil Disobedience.. Emerson asks him when hes in jail "What are you doing in there?" and he replies "What are you doing out there?"
    question. Is that quote from Donny Darko?... it fits perfectly with your poem, how one person's conformity, is another originality.

    thanks for posting it :)

    Guermo
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]



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