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    dots Submission Name: my life as it goesdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       good one according to me i just depicting as life went by. oldies


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    dotsmy life as it goesdots
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    life that started sweet as it did
    find did i love the happiness the gift
    love everywhere towards me that i found
    born was i with the life with a shift.

    grow as i did so did my feelings
    stronger and it did in the days to come
    find did i find the happiness and pain
    funny it seems in the life to fore come.

    love did i see the woman of my dreams
    maya i thought for so it seems
    tell me the truth are you with me
    and find so i did that dreams are dreams.

    school did end with another to see
    yet will i remember her till death
    find did i find her gorgeous in all
    yet she did go apart from me to set,

    set my life did she do to thank
    my love for her forever will be
    deep was the wound but the wound did heal
    wait will i see the real maya to be.

    so now i am waiting for the one
    wait will i wait forever if to live
    dream't have i on how she will be
    life continues till for not to forgive.




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