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    dots Submission Name: my oh mydots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       teen lust. what else. oldies


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    dotsmy oh mydots
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    the turn and the twist
    the hip of a dame
    the eyes the brains and all that burst
    she entered the heart in the hall of fame.

    love or like the woman the style
    eyes or any of what i think
    stare than look is what i did
    sight them in all without a blink.

    like it or not i still watch her
    don't you get bored oh! no i don't
    one in all for in life to spend
    my oh my the woman that came and went.




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