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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Well the name says it all. oldies


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    dotsRaindots
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    The magic drop which comes from the sky,
    comes with a change from high.
    The fresh water fertilizing the land,
    making the power rich which is sand.
    Plants row with lush color green,
    making the land beautiful and serene.
    Jumping with fun animals as to be,
    for their thirst will forever flee.
    Days and days of starving are over for them
    as the biggest lunch is ready for some.
    Rain is the power which started this,
    it is the gift which is neither her or his.




    Submitted on 2008-02-28 04:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Indeed.
    I wrote something like this, well i wrote about rain, that is... when i was younger. It's a renewable source.
    I can kind of tell this is an old piece, only because i looked at your current age (23?) and kind of...
    assumed, that if you wrote something like it again you'd expand on it... maybe...
    because the concept of "renewing life" can be much more complex.
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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