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    dots Submission Name: Islanddots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsIslanddots
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    All over the haunted island
    The wan goblins will make their run,
    Up into the clouds, a sky land,
    Until there are none.

    Now over this stone strewn island
    Wherever pale ghosts come and go,
    In tombs on this bone strewn island,
    Stay covered in snow.

    Now the reefs run round this island
    As they foam like pale ivory,
    Dark dreams have long crowned this island
    Over the sea.

    From shore side up to the highland,
    Loom only the ghosts of dead trees,
    From wetland on through the dry land,
    Whispers the breeze.





    Submitted on 2008-02-28 14:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very imaginative. I love your use of wording in this piece. It really adds effect to the story you're telling. Well done!
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      If one were shipwrecked, one could only hope he would not have to take refuge on this island!! The Sea holds many secrets and shields many haunts, and this ghostly tale perhaps reveals one of them!

    Interesting tale, and conducted as always with your ghostly storytelling excellence!
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Interesting, Don't really have any criticism, found this to be quite original, and haven't seen one like it. In my own eyes that's a good thing. Original in the theme and imagery, I do not write much poetry however.
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by Aleitheian | [ Reply to This ]


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