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    dots Submission Name: Your Stage Nowdots

    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 627
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYour Stage Nowdots

    Never with you
    Always without
    I'll make my own hell
    To deal, devout
    Fuck you dearly
    You worthless man
    You broke me bad
    And that's a fact
    I'll never forget
    The tears I shed
    For your dumb ass
    As I lay in bed
    I gave up life
    So you could have yours
    Guess what I got?
    Slammed fucking doors
    You kept me hidden
    In a world so dark
    I felt I was drowning
    I fell off the Arc
    I can't deal with you
    I can't take it, I swear
    There's just something in me
    That's gasping for air
    You pollute my Earth
    With your fucking self
    There's so much to say
    But hardly time to, I know
    So keep building your lie
    It'll make a great show.

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