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    dots Submission Name: Perversiondots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsPerversiondots
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    I wasn't in love
    That much is true
    Until that day
    The sunlight came through
    You kept me far
    From girlish dreams
    Said they were "dumb"
    Or so it seems
    I gave you my soul
    Of that which I'm sorry
    to a foolish young boy
    Who struck out to mar me
    It's hard to believe
    You cheated on me
    With a girl named Samantha
    Who's not appealing
    You both had one dear
    You both were committed
    But you couldn't own up
    You couldn't admit it
    I can't stand you now
    Probably won't ever
    You had cam sex with her
    While we were together.




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      jesus. the [censored], sounds remarkably like a tale of the woman who slept with my friends while i was in rehab and wrote me a letter confessing, how oh! so dear i was to her, and then pissed on my dreams. people can be so stale and obtuse. so malicious and indecipherable, like stupid coded messages that you spend your whol life trying to figure out what they mean, only to realize they say blow it out of your ass.
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by colbybradshaw | [ Reply to This ]


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