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    dots Submission Name: Crescendodots

    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       built off of the idea that when an ending is near, the leading up-points get louder.


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    hallways, masses of people, and faces, blurred
    doors close, doors open, talking.

    this idea, this concept, i will
    find someway to defy it all
    and find a meaning


    I didn't, I wasn't crying, no, I said it very gently,
    i said, "I feel tired. tired, and scared." and she said, "why?
    you shouldn't feel tired."
    i said "it's been a nightmare...."
    and she just smiled and said, "I can imagine..."
    I wonder... could she really...see that?
    Did she really know?


    when the path laid before us
    even in sight.
    some of us have to carve out
    our own personal road
    and success isn't something that's promised by birth


    even if the days are numbered
    down to the very hour and minute and second
    what real concept of time do we have as humans?
    I feel the tendency
    to forget about time,
    and then suddenly it's back

    someday we'll have to say goodbye.
    'cause saying 'goodbye' is better than
    saying nothing at all...


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      I was listening to the Rolling Stones, "Get Off My Cloud" and right when I read the word stanza, "even if the days are numbered..." the song & I both clicked with your piece on the word back!

    I like the way this was like a wind scattering seeds of thought all around - I like pieces that seem senseless but full of sense at the same time.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    | Posted on 2008-03-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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