You know men have them but you did'nt give the most high ones of the subject.You can lose the reader that way.Notice I said you did'nt not failed,just another simple mistake we poets make in our little short pieces.You made a point but I believe that could have been practice for you. 3.5stars
Overall, I can see your point, but there are some grammar errors that seriously take away from the intensity of the poem. Now, I'll admit public education is lacking in this area; so I'll help you out. keep your tense the same throughout the poem, "Despair has been a friend" is past tense where "Keeping you alive for a while" is present tense and then you transition back to "Then you found yourself lost" which is past again. Go back and decide which way you want to swing and go with it.
This line "For every lonely men" fails to make sense. It should either be for every lonely man or for many lonely men. Just keeping your pronouns in conjunction with its context.
And one more thing that seems to help out the reader is if you add punctuation. A period symbolizes the end of a thought and a comma a pause. Just seems to help with the flow.
Keep it up, with these few minor changes, your poem could be elite!