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    dots Submission Name: They'd Killdots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    17/f/ tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 297/159/67
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 86
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 854



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    dotsThey'd Killdots
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    Some just don't think we'll make it,
    that we won't last long.
    So here's my hand, please take it.
    Help me prove them wrong.

    Say "i love you" and don't fake it.
    Give me your whole heart.
    I promise not to break it
    or let it fall apart.

    Let's show up all those bitches
    who think they know it all.
    Who can't wait for the day
    they finally see us fall.

    Let's throw it in their faces
    when we reach our happy ending.
    Of course we take it personal,
    this is our love we're defending!

    Let's show them what we're made of,
    that what we've got is real.
    Deep down they're all just jealous;
    for a love like this, they'd kill.




    Submitted on 2008-03-01 12:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this because it is a perfect and well written retaliation to things even I have said in the past about friends who I did not think should be together.
    I was a hater, too- I guess.
    Even though I always turned out to be right and they should have listened to me.
    They did not get to prove me wrong, ever. -But I thought this was cute!
    You have made every argument you can make. Now it just depends how bad you both want it and only time can tell the rest.
    Good luck on showing up those bit<hes!!!
    Hahaha!
    -Ceyx
    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]
      so.. YOU must be in l...o...v...e .
    this is really good, you should enter. the contest..
    im a beginner...
    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by being me | [ Reply to This ]
      wow Sacrites, this is deep and beautiful, `beautiful strength"

    I much admire this, I really do. fight for love beacuse love is real, love is us.

    `Of course we take it personal"

    Excellent!!


    P.S

    Even though I don't know you


    I love you
    | Posted on 2008-03-01 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good. You had good rhythm and itflowed well; just the end was forced a bit.
    I think it coulduse a bit more imagery ; though that's just my preference.

    Some people are men and only want to see you fall; keep on proving them wrong!
    | Posted on 2008-03-01 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]



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