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    dots Submission Name: Macbethdots
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    Author: eyeless in gaza
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 235/170/53
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Yesterday,I attended a funeral .
    An older member of the family was laid to rest,
    his last act
    upon the worlds stage.
    Tonight , I shall go and watch
    Macbeth
    in the local theatre, more drama and death
    to ring out the cold grey month of February .
    And when the play is over
    the actors will take their curtain call,
    bowing amidst standing ovations,
    the thunderclap of hands.
    And bouquets,
    thanking them for their performance.
    Quite different from yesterday,
    after the long speech
    only silence in the church.
    As we sent him on his way
    with flowers and tears.




    Submitted on 2008-03-01 13:24:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow.
    This is an awesome poem.
    I have only three small (and nitpicky) comments.

    Line 4: "world's" instead of "worlds"

    Line 8: maybe "ring out IN the month of February"?

    Line 17: maybe "THERE WAS only " or "silence WAS in"

    Of course, these comments are highly insensitive. I'm sorry. This is a beautiful piece.
    | Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by WhatYouWill | [ Reply to This ]


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