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    dots Submission Name: Swandots
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    Author: Rex Gold
    ASL Info:    18/m/U.S.A
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 60/46/67
    Words: 391
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 66
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1972



    Description:
       I wrote this to explain the way a beautiful young woman should carry herself and at the same time don't become obsessed with her own image.That beauty is useless if your misusing it.I'll break every line down if you want, just hit me up.


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    dotsSwandots
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    Treasure, what's your pleasure?
    (I'm falling away, for you)
    The fountain is a bond but not ours
    The trees have sparkled, these are'nt stars
    Your eyes have a pale red, in the finest
    example
    sandals for your feet, in the hot
    diamonds that are real, for your neck in the
    fog
    The brass is your path, not theirs

    Doll, be vida not a vixen
    Sit supreme, not like a slut
    Plot your transformation, don't blot too much
    Be the friend of a dust bunny
    not as an opal untouched
    So drink water and don't slurp in any fashion
    Treasure, what's your pleasure?
    (I'm falling away, for you)
    It can take years to build
    but for you, just days to produce
    Steal hearts, not words for slander
    No matter how infatuated
    Don't slap her, don't scratch, hand her

    Doll, be the life of the pond not a diva
    All cascades are'nt for your sight
    so you must wait for your throne
    to be pulled out
    in order to sit in front of white clothe,
    under white clouds, beside black bowties
    sophisticated women talk, not go off
    Let all your feathers and steps count, arise

    Presto, swans do not give in to falsettos
    Veteran, what are your methods
    (It's not me who desires to know)
    You don't need a mirror, you own a pool
    Pletus, be patient, don't strut
    walk and swim composed, gloss to soothe
    float and glide eagle eyed, finesse to move
    Most of all, prepare for mistakes
    cos swans do not make dirty water excuses
    Now fly Pletus, fly and follow your spirit.




    Submitted on 2008-03-01 14:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      all in all, a good write, "treasure, what's your pleasure" kept drawing me in.

    but I must ask, who are you to dictate how a young women should act?

    Not my intention to offend.
    But I'm wondering what gave you the authority.
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by die_another_day | [ Reply to This ]



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