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    dots Submission Name: suddenly fold outwarddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    oh,
    & i'm blonde
    with the adamantine posture
    of broken doves
    about me.

    i've been illuviating myself
    into the hollow earth
    of my sacred palm.
    i am inside myself
    an island.

    would you still know me
    if the daedal of my body
    were to suddenly fold outwards
    into the blue air?

    we have this unsecured bond
    of the heart
    as humans.
    but the vallation of my interior walls
    obscures me from my darling haunt.

    i'm writhing
    through the moist beginning
    of the forest undergrowth.
    i think i've found the way home.

    i follow the robin
    & i'm loose
    in the movement of flowers around me.

    all-mother,
    open to me
    all your sun-spilt dreams
    in lovers.




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      I love the title of this piece. That's what made me read it. I can connect to it. I always had the same feeling, that the true I is different from these humans. I could never connect to anyone here. I think that's what this poem is about. That's why in your the last stanza it seems to go back to nature. Like nature was the only one that understands you. Good write!
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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