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    dots Submission Name: Fork in a Philosocketdots
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    Author: 2bheard
    ASL Info:    17/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 9/10/9
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Them
    Total Views: 113
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1341



    Description:
       one of my more well-though-out poems.. not a lot of consistency in rhyme or reason, oddly enough, but definitely the most profound. probably because it isn't about love. haha.
    criticize without disguise¢¾
    pax vobiscum, 2bheard


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    dotsFork in a Philosocketdots
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    raped by the invading presence of morality
    i am faced with a choice: do i act on beliefs?
    or, should temptation arise, do i succumb to simplicity?
    go back on it all and reform into hypocrisy

    last night i cried as soon as i realized
    that, be there a heaven or not, we're all going to die
    is to die really to sleep? or is it something much worse?
    when you die does your soul slip away from the corpse?

    what if death is just living outside of yourself
    people witness your burial, you witness everyone else
    but no connection can be made in between
    and you're left standing alone--unheard; unseen

    what's heaven if you can't feel relief in death
    what's heaven if lung cancer takes away your breath
    what's heaven if you meet up with the ones you loved
    but love is not an option because the bullet in the gun
    was the reason that you died
    the reason why inside
    the bullet in your heart doesn't lie, even though you try

    does consequence meet you in the elevator up
    or does it really not matter if you died or gave it up
    being tired of living or trying hard to survive
    doesn't matter when the option of living isn't alive




    Submitted on 2008-03-01 19:29:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This particular piece caught my eye because of your third stanza. It was almost surreal, I had a dream identical to the way you described it.
    Anyway back to your whole write. Well thought out, although you didn't stick to a particular format it had enough question in every stanza to keep me reading. And I like the fact that the end of the poem seemed slightly dark, but in its entirety it was very... bright for lack of a better word. Good job. Keep it up.

    -Kyle
    | Posted on 2008-03-01 00:00:00 | by Broken Halo | [ Reply to This ]



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