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    dots Submission Name: This House of Minedots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Just feel so bored lately. And lonely. No one really to talk to. thats all. I feel like such a loser. But yeah0 thats just me.



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    dotsThis House of Minedots
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    Grey walls
    Staring back at me
    Not blinking
    Just staying here
    Waiting for
    A smile

    No ceiling
    Only open skies
    So blue
    So beautiful
    Reminds me of so much-
    So much that was
    Once a part of me

    My wind is
    Blowing me away
    Like the dandelion in
    The field
    Unwanted
    So alone
    Even though
    Everyone’s around her
    Silently
    The bells toll once more
    It’s raining yet again




    Submitted on 2004-06-29 17:42:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem. It's very honest and I think a lot of people can undestand how you are feeling. Lonliness is not a fun way to feel, but pretty much everyone feels it sometime in their life. I thought this piece was a nice way describe your emotions. Good wording.
    | Posted on 2004-06-29 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont have a f-ing clue what this poem is about but i like it. the title is simple and sugests that it is just about some house but its more than that. there are feelings in the poem. its not about the house but about the emotion of the poet. i dont pretend to understand what your feeling but i like this poem. and the ending is awesome. it makes no sense but sounds perfect. i like this poem. keep them comeing. i like intelegent stuff that confuses me. and now im talking nosense. am i making sense? anyways good write
    | Posted on 2004-06-29 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa i think the locke dude (comment under mine) got a little carried away. Amazing the stupidity that people will write just to get their ratios up. Anyways.. I really liked the darkness and sadness and loneliness and the death and the suicide you put into this. I sometimes look at something.. and it'll remind me of such a good time in my life.. like the opposite of right now.. you have a gun i can borrow?? ok later.. good write.

    Bruno
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good poem VERY
    i think that you are one extremely skilled writers on this web site im reading all of your material
    its very good stuff keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by locke | [ Reply to This ]


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