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    dots Submission Name: The poem of Jamii Nesbittdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 862
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this poem is by me
    for me and those like me
    from the viewpoint of a love martyr


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    dotsThe poem of Jamii Nesbittdots
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    ...and you seem to say
    the story of the world
    while she sits and hides
    She looks loved when she smiles,
    she looks sad when i don't see her
    I assume
    I've never seen how she looks
    when I'm not in the room




    Submitted on 2008-03-02 20:09:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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