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    dots Submission Name: cellar doordots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 536
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1193



    Description:
       about: im not going to talk about the contents, but the title is in reference to the movie donnie darko. there is a scene where donnie's teacher has the words 'cellar door' written on the chalkboard and when he inquires to their meaning, she says that j.r.r. tolkien said that 'cellar door' was the most beautiful combination of words in the english language.

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    dotscellar doordots
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    weve got time to lose,
    weve got ambitions to waste
    and if theres anything worth it
    its if this is all you wanted
    and if nites by windows keep you aglow
    then its in all our best interests
    to never let you go

    too fragile to move
    so hard not to rush it
    shes losing him
    and hes losing touch
    with the simplest things
    weve taken for granted
    and now were scared to death
    that death isnt buying
    even the toughest looks
    to slow down and were all just
    slow motion symphonies

    shes got walls to climb,
    shes got such perfect woes
    and if hes there waiting
    on the other side of amazing
    its safe to say shell feel
    safe to stay with failed saints
    like me and you

    too fragile to move
    so hard not to rush it
    shes losing him
    and hes losing touch
    with the simplest things
    weve taken for granted
    and now were scared to death
    that death isnt buying
    even the toughest looks
    to slow down and were all just
    slow motion symphonies




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love that. It's pretty and sad and somewhat haunting (which is a perfect combination, if you ask me).
    As you already know, I am in love with the way you word things... but every time I read something else, I'm inspired to repeat overused (but still very true) compliments.

    Every line is amazing. I can't pick a favorite part.

    It's gorgeous (as are you ;) ).



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    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      this is wonderful... sad and eery in a way, but beautiful at the same time. i really liked it!
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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