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    dots Submission Name: The braindots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsThe braindots
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    what does the brain do work and work,
    no stopping only needing a jerk.
    Once starts begins to improve,
    until the knowledge it can approve.
    More concentration leads to success,
    but a little disturbance can make a mess.
    Every time it tries to wonder,
    about anything from clouds to thunder.
    Attention is needed more than concentration,
    indirect is the method with better intention.
    Either from work there is enjoyment,
    where time is spared or is lent.
    Even here the brain does work,
    never to start before death par birth.




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