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    dots Submission Name: TIMEdots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 754
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Oldies. As time passed by i thought of something to write. I just then thought time does fly and the poem therefore.

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    LESS or more time may be
    it is important for us to see
    time and tide , waits for none
    it goes as we go round the sun
    no one can stop it is a dimension
    fourth to be which causes much tension
    for some ,time may be less
    varying upon the work and fuss
    for some time is these
    forever so as to spare
    never going back from night to dawn
    date by date which goes on
    so do something for the use of time
    cause each second can cost you a time

    Submitted on 2008-03-03 03:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are very intelligent and articulate I could tell by two reasons before I read ne of your work.
    1.Your picture
    2.How much work you post and the titles of them.
    Time has so many definitonsd to it it's endless.
    You are so correct on every line I like.I might pu t this in my favs as a first. 5stars

    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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