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    dots Submission Name: dulling me down...dots

    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsdulling me down...dots

    unwrapped lacerations


    rounded down


    watch me drown

    Took a deep breath of water today
    Took six steps and turned the page
    As my sliced arm waves goodbye
    "All the world is but a stage"
    and that's strange to me
    I can't understand the words you use
    and it's so strange to me
    That it's all just dulling me down

    Shred my arm for the streamers at your party
    Append razors edge and drink some Bacardi
    On 36 cuts, spit a mouthful of rum
    Runs down my fingers to a shot glass and then I drink some
    and it pains me so
    I canít feel the deepest part of me
    and it just pains me so
    Youíre holding my hand- but I just want to let go

    I just want to let go
    I just want to let go

    Itís all just dulling me down

    sutures unfastened (like a corset in a brothel)
    So nice to talk to you
    fading and wearisome (like a martyr's soul)
    So nice to see you again
    discomforting desire
    (love the monster under your bed who licks the flesh off your feet at night)

    Iíd love to come to your picnic!
    (Shhhhh- I wonít tell that the potato saladís poisoned with your tears)
    Sorry to fuck up your plans for the evening
    I know you had your little heart set to go to the dance
    But a corpse is a corpse is a corpse of a dream as reality and itís fragile seams

    Took a deep breath of water today
    Let it fill the hole that was eaten in May
    Felt the wound inside and turned away
    I know it really does not matter more what I say-
    my words have just been dulled down...

    Submitted on 2008-03-03 06:12:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i had to comment on this one again. the imagery just blows my mind...
    "sutures unfastened (like a corset in a brothel)"
    "Shred my arm for the streamers at your party"

    if this is one of those poems i wish i had wrote but i'm glad you did
    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      oh...oh my there are tears in my eyes but i'm glad your the one that made them come...!!!

    this was tragic, i loved. a favorite. i dont even know where words should start. an aching soul and breath of understanding.

    dazzling (and i'm wearing my shades just for you)

    as much as many people will say that cutting is clichť this is art. this means so much more than that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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