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    dots Submission Name: Beauty of nightdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 971
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this one a loooonnngggg time ago I think it sucks so please be gental with the critism.. Umm Enjoy?


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    dotsBeauty of nightdots
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    The moon is gone.
    Hidden with darkness,
    Deep in the sky.
    I peer into the shadows.
    Headlights fill the street,
    A motorcycle speeds by.
    All again returns to night.
    No more light,
    To sting my eyes.
    Sounds of silence.
    What beautiful things?
    A child in the distance cries.
    This too is soon quieted.
    I lay down,
    Shut off my weary mind.
    My eyes are closed,
    As is my mind,
    I drift off to a magical ride.




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 10:54:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm. Its ok. Like you made it because you had nothing else to do. It also had me rush through it because it diddnt catch me as anything interesting.
    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it makes me think of the neccessity of darkness. Not the depressing darkness that most people seem to be interested in here, but the darkness of quiet, restful thought
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Paddy21 | [ Reply to This ]


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