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    dots Submission Name: The Trust Testdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 660
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1248



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    dotsThe Trust Testdots
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    Here, i am, I am new--
    A new sensation on your tongue,
    new air to force your lungs
    Open
    So breathe wide,
    And breathe slow,
    Both deep and low
    And focus...

    Step back, fall into my arms
    with a sigh,
    Yes
    I know we're high.
    Trust me please just
    trust me this time
    I will catch you...
    Gently,
    slowly, softly,
    So hence we,
    can be safer
    can be soft, too,
    I'd emotionally pay,
    The cost if I lost you

    So trust me,
    My thoughts have never,
    Been so pure,
    My hands shake,
    But they've never,
    Been so sure
    Around your waist,

    Just trust me once, if once only,
    You'll never forget,
    How it is to freefall,
    In my arms and just rest

    And here, i am, I am new--
    A new sensation on your tongue,
    new air to force your lungs
    Open
    So breathe wide,
    And breathe slow,
    Both deep and low
    And focus...

    Yes...
    I know we're high.
    But trust me,
    I will catch you.
    I want to,
    Everytime




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 11:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi there,
    I'm glad I checked in. Haven't written anything lately but thought I'd see who had. This is really nice. It's the kind of thing I think a lot of women would like to hear, "Trust me, I will catch you."
    I've only had one person in my life tell me, 'You're gonna have to trust someone sooner or later.' I did trust that person.
    I have some thoughts on that topic that I think I'll write about, since you've brought it to the forefront of my mind. Thank you, and take care, sweetie.
    Anna (amrslamr)
    | Posted on 2008-03-24 00:00:00 | by amrslamr | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was beautiful. and quite well written too, even though it was merely simple language and repetition. it works! a special poem for someone special? whatever, I like it and would like to publish it next month in my journal, with your permission. please visit unfetteredverse.blogspot.com and check it out, then let me know. thanks for the great read.

    Deborah
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. As with all of your writing it has a beautiful flow and paints wonderful pictures in my mind. Very well and beautifully wrote. Good job ^-^.
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it,its different and reads originallity.the way you use your words are very descriptive it was as if you tok me on a ride.your poem is good i like cause its very different, good keep writing man,you have a true talent

    - verniece
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by vlarrimore | [ Reply to This ]


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