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    dots Submission Name: Miss You Babydots
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    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 656



    Description:
       Song dedicated to no one. But possibly will be if he goes through with his plan.


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    dotsMiss You Babydots
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    You make me want to hang from a rope
    Slit my wrists and bleed out my hope
    I want to fade away
    When I'm with you

    Staring at your stone
    Marble and oh so cold
    I know you here
    And yet your gone

    And everyday I ask myself
    Why did you shoot yourself
    Why did that bullet pierce your heart
    Because I loved you from the start

    You make me want to die
    And you make me want to cry
    But the tears wont come
    I've cried myself dry

    So here I sit
    On top your shallow grave
    Slashing away
    All the pain




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 12:05:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's good that you did'nt consider this dark but most all love because it reveals your lovely side in the reaction to tradgedy. 5stars
    Your very graphic.
    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      wow....this really has a lot of emotion in it...i have never lost someone one to death or suicide, but i've lost them in many other ways...and it is painfull....this almost made me want to cry..it was a very good write. keep up the good work.
    ~lonely goth~
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by lonely goth | [ Reply to This ]


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